英语作文评析,并指出错误 正文如下,Today after school,Xiao Ming went to home on foot.Suddenly,he saw a small cute bird singing on the tree.He wanted to catch the bird,so he found a stone and through to the bird.The bird wanted to fly awa

英语作文评析,并指出错误 正文如下,Today after school,Xiao Ming went to home on foot.Suddenly,he saw a small cute bird singing on the tree.He wanted to catch the bird,so he found a stone and through to the bird.The bird wanted to fly awa
英语作文评析,并指出错误 正文如下,
Today after school,Xiao Ming went to home on foot.Suddenly,he saw a small cute bird singing on the tree.He wanted to catch the bird,so he found a stone and through to the bird.The bird wanted to fly away,but the stone flied faster than the bird.The bird fell down the tree,Xiao Ming was very happy to catched the bird.
Xiao Ming’s teacher passed here soon,he was very angry to see that.He told Xiao Ming be king of animals,and asked he took it home and made it become well.

英语作文评析,并指出错误 正文如下,Today after school,Xiao Ming went to home on foot.Suddenly,he saw a small cute bird singing on the tree.He wanted to catch the bird,so he found a stone and through to the bird.The bird wanted to fly awa
1small和cute位置调换
这是形容词位置摆放原则
2on the tree介词改为in
3through改成throw,throw才是扔的意思 而且过去式是threw
4The bird noticed that what the boy to do.The bird was
about to fly away when the stone hit it .
这句话替换the bird wanted …到faster than the bird
5fell down the tree,down后加from
6soon改成in this time
7改为kind那前面也该加to
to be kind of
8asked 后的he 用宾格him
asked him to take it to home

我帮你修改一下，你注意下面几个重点：
1。句子的结构 不要用过短句子，那样的话显得很零碎
2。注意定语的几种用法：定语短语 还有定语从句
3。
Today, Xiaoming saw a small injured bird tweeting on a tree when he went home after school .你看我把你的前面句子修改后是不是顺流一些...

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我帮你修改一下，你注意下面几个重点：
1。句子的结构 不要用过短句子，那样的话显得很零碎
2。注意定语的几种用法：定语短语 还有定语从句
3。
Today, Xiaoming saw a small injured bird tweeting on a tree when he went home after school .你看我把你的前面句子修改后是不是顺流一些了？主语就剩一个名字了，后面增加了一个时间状语从句。He picked a stone and threw to the bird.去掉so ,so常用于总结。Before flying away , the bird was hit by the stone ,and it fell on the groud and was caught by Xiaoming who felt very happy .
Xiaoming's teacher was right passing there and saw the whole story . He was very angry and told Xiaoming to be friendly to the bird , and ask him to take the bird home and treat it well.
造句时要选择主要的名字作主语，次要的主语放在从句中，这样更连贯。另外，逗号和句号的用法要掌握，特别是更换主语时候一定要换句号。

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1. went to home 改为went home 【home前面不能加to】
2.through to【through没有动词形式，前面加个go之类的就可以与to连用了】
3.to catched 【这个to后面是原型吧，改为catch】
4.told Xiao Ming be 【told sb. to do sth.所以是to be】
5.King【表示这个...

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1. went to home 改为went home 【home前面不能加to】
2.through to【through没有动词形式，前面加个go之类的就可以与to连用了】
3.to catched 【这个to后面是原型吧，改为catch】
4.told Xiao Ming be 【told sb. to do sth.所以是to be】
5.King【表示这个词不是adj.吧是打错了吧 应该是Kind】
6.asked he took 【ask sb. to do sth.而且he应该用宾格形式. 应改为 asked him to take】
7. made it become well【有种中式英文的感觉，我觉得改为let him look after it ,比较好吧】
暂时只找出这么多 我也初三刚毕业.....

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