英语高人找错误!请帮我改下面一段话的错误!Jane told me you are change your job in a art decoration company last time.So suddently I have a idea,I don’t know it’s possible for you,that I can provide some oil paintings for you.So y

英语高人找错误!请帮我改下面一段话的错误!Jane told me you are change your job in a art decoration company last time.So suddently I have a idea,I don’t know it’s possible for you,that I can provide some oil paintings for you.So y
英语高人找错误!
请帮我改下面一段话的错误!
Jane told me you are change your job in a art decoration company last time.So suddently I have a idea,I don’t know it’s possible for you,that I can provide some oil paintings for you.So you can sell it to your client decorating their house.I have both high and low price painting,if you think this easy going.I can give you lots of different choice with paintting.Of course,if you help me to sell it out that my gallery will also give you allowance.What do you think?Anyway,this is out gallery on show’s painting.Please download and preview it.And also welcome to my gallery to have a art tour.Look forward hearing from you.

英语高人找错误!请帮我改下面一段话的错误!Jane told me you are change your job in a art decoration company last time.So suddently I have a idea,I don’t know it’s possible for you,that I can provide some oil paintings for you.So y
Jane told me you CHANGED your job TO aN art decoration company last time.(So删掉） Suddently COME UP WITH aN idea that I can provide some oil paintings for you.I don’t know IF it’s possible for you.(So删掉） you can sell it to your clientS decorating their house.I have PAINTINGS AT both high and low priceS.If you AGREE,I can give you lots of different choiceS OF paintting.Of course,if you COULD help me to sell it out that my gallery will also give you allowance.What do you think?Anyway,this is out gallery on show’s painting.Please download and preview it.And also welcome to my gallery to have aN art tour.Look forward hearing from you.
修改的都用大写字母写出来啦!还有这句不明白楼主想说什么,告诉我,我帮你再改一下.Anyway,this is out gallery on show’s painting.

Jane told me you had changed your job in an art decoration company last time. So suddently I have an idea, I don’t know if it’s possible for you, but I can provide some oil paintings for you. So you c...

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Jane told me you had changed your job in an art decoration company last time. So suddently I have an idea, I don’t know if it’s possible for you, but I can provide some oil paintings for you. So you can sell it to your client for decorating their houses. I have both high and low price painting, if you think it's easy going. I can give you lots of different choice with painttings. Of course, if you help me to sell them out that my gallery will also give you allowance.What do you think? Anyway, this is outr gallery on show’s painting. Please download and preview it. And also welcome to my gallery to have an art tour. Look forward hearing from you.

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are change ---changed
a art-an art
know ()it’s ---if
for you---with you
sell it ---sell them
client---clients
house---houses
choice with paintting---choices of painting

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are change ---changed
a art-an art
know ()it’s ---if
for you---with you
sell it ---sell them
client---clients
house---houses
choice with paintting---choices of painting
sell it---sell them
out that ---out
will also ---would also
out gallery on show’s painting---a show out of gallary
a art ---an art
forward hearing---forward to hearing

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Last time Jane told me that you have changed your job into an art decoration company. So I just got an idea, I don't know if it is right for you. I think I could provide some oil paintings to you. and...

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Last time Jane told me that you have changed your job into an art decoration company. So I just got an idea, I don't know if it is right for you. I think I could provide some oil paintings to you. and you can sell them to your clients to decorate their house. I have many kinds of painting, some are expensive and some are cheap. If you think it is ok, I can give you many kinds of painting samples for your choice. Of course if you could help me sell our painting, we also can give you commission. What do you think about it?
Anyway, this is out gallery on show’s painting. Please download and preview it. And also welcome to my gallery to have a art tour. Looking forward to your reply.

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【说明】原文没大毛病，都是一些小的语法错误。有个别句型和表达错误。都已纠正过来，如下。
I heard from Jane you're hopping to an art decoration company lately. That gives me an idea: feasible or not, I want to provide some oil paintings for y...

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【说明】原文没大毛病，都是一些小的语法错误。有个别句型和表达错误。都已纠正过来，如下。
I heard from Jane you're hopping to an art decoration company lately. That gives me an idea: feasible or not, I want to provide some oil paintings for you, so you can sell them to your client, decorating their houses. I have paintings of wide ranges from low to high prices, among which people can choose what they like. Of course, you can get allowance from every painting sold. What do you say? Here attached is the outlook of paintings from our gallery, hope you have a look at them. And we'll also be delighted if you can come to our gallery to have an art tour. Look forward to your early reply!

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Jane told me you have changed your job to work in an art decoration company . So suddently I have an idea, I don’t know whether it’s proper for you, that I can provide some oil paintings for you. So y...

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Jane told me you have changed your job to work in an art decoration company . So suddently I have an idea, I don’t know whether it’s proper for you, that I can provide some oil paintings for you. So you can sell them to your clients to decorate their houses. I have both high and low price paintings. If you think this is feasible,I can give you lots of different choices of painttings. Of course, you will get some allowance if you can help me to sell them .What do you think about? And this is one of our gallery's paintings that are on show. Please download and preview it. Welcome to my gallery to have an art tour. Looking forward to hearing from you.

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都很有问题

这是一封信。对吗？
Jane told me (that)you are(have) change(changed) your job in a(an) art decoration company last time(放到句首比较好）。
Last time, Jane told me that you have found a new job in an
art dec...

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这是一封信。对吗？
Jane told me (that)you are(have) change(changed) your job in a(an) art decoration company last time(放到句首比较好）。
Last time, Jane told me that you have found a new job in an
art decoration company.Congratulations!
So suddently I have a idea, I don’t know it’s possible for you, that I can provide some oil paintings for you.
(个人认为，直接说出你的想法就好。）
Do you think it is a good idea that sell some oil paintings which are provided from my gallery to your guests to make their houses more beautiful.
So you can sell it to your client decorating their house.
I have both high and low price painting, if you think this easy going.
I can give you lots of different choice with paintting.
(There are plenty of perfect oil paitings for the guests choices.You may download and preview some of them.)
Of course, if you help me to sell it out that my gallery will also give you allowance.
(Surly, you will get reasonable commission if the oil paiting is sold.)
What do you think? Anyway, this is out gallery on show’s painting.
(How about your opinion and welcome to my gallery for a visiting.)
Please download and preview it.
And also welcome to my gallery to have a art tour.
Look forward hearing from you.
(Looking forward hearing from you.)
(Best wishes,)
(your sincerely XXX)
只是个人观点，可能不合乎您的要求。仅供参考。

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